Its ok.
I like the story telling elements and the crazy situations you get in. Its pretty whiny tho and personally it be cool if it was funnier. You don't really rap over it to much you mostly just rant over a beat.This technique could work,I just wish the chorus was more angrier and less whiny.When you talk over it kind of reminds me of the band "Suicidal tendecies" Just one pepsi,one pepsi but she wouldn't give it to me.So sweet crazy stories but I wish you flowed on the beat more (instead of ranting on it) and I wish you were more pissed off on the chorus.